18 Apr
2017
18 Apr
'17
3:14 p.m.
On 04/18/2017 04:09 PM, Jeff Sandys wrote:
M. Duffy,
I think the structure of the statement is wrong and could be improved by changing it like this:
**Fedora creates an innovative open platform for users, community members and software developers to build solutions that lights up hardware, containers and clouds.**
One test of a good statement (like a good image) is you can redact parts of it and it still makes sense. People build solutions that light up clouds, I'm sure that is an image you can work with.
The "lights up" piece still seems a bit off to me, fairly cheesy. We could illustrate "lighting up" without literally needing that term in the statement.
~m