Re: Cockpit article ready for review`

[Shaun Assam]

Thank you Paul, I appreciate that. I also appreciate the feedback. I'm always open for
comments to improve my writing skills and I'll be sure to keep it in mind for future
articles and compositions.

I'll keep you posted on the next article.

Thanks and regards,

Shaun Assam
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Sent: Wednesday, October 9, 2019 9:54:02 PM
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Subject: Re: Cockpit article ready for review`

Shaun, this is another slam dunk. You are really good at these articles. Each has been
very clearly written and has just the right balance of content -- how to get core tasks
done without getting too esoteric.

One thing I did in editing... and this is REALLY nitpicky... is using "will" for
future tense. I find I can usually eliminate this in favor of present tense for
incrementally stronger writing. For example, "this button will turn the screen
off" becomes "this button turns the screen off." Again, this is a nit. I
found your prose easy to read and top-notch. Really well done!

I finished minor edits on this article, so it's ready to go anytime.

Paul

On Wed, Oct 9, 2019 at 8:31 AM Shaun Assam
<[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>> wrote:
Greetings,

The 4th article in the Cockpit series is complete and ready for review. As always if
there's any suggestions let me know.

Regards,

Shaun Assam
FAS: sassam
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