Thank you very much Dale!
I know my grammar is not very good, but I continue learning :)
Thanks for all the tips and explainations about my mistakes. I value them the most and I'm learning a lot.
I will apply the changes to the document and after that I will probably cut it in two parts. The setup and the usage.
Will come back with news! Thanks and cheers!
On Wed, Jun 27, 2018 at 3:23 AM Dale Raby daleraby@gmail.com wrote:
Hi Oliver,
I opened your .txt article in LibreOffice Writer, made notes for you in red, the saved the altered document with a .odt filename extension. Mostly it reads coherently and an English speaker might find some of the phrasing a little unusual, but he would understand most of it. Even us Anglos don't always agree on how to say some things.
All in all, its a well-written article.
On Tue, Jun 26, 2018 at 4:45 AM, Oliver Gutierrez ogutierrez@redhat.com wrote:
Thank you very much Dale. I'm fixing the whole things you pointed. Almost all of them make sense from the IT part. :)
I will finish the modifications maybe today or tomorrown and I will change the document to a text document so you can review it better :)
Thanks for your help and your time!
On Sat, Jun 23, 2018 at 4:53 AM Dale Raby daleraby@gmail.com wrote:
Just put in some suggestions. Your English is better than my Spanish but I found a few minor grammatical errors.
The biggest problem I found was that there seems to be a large block of text that is a duplication. The section with the graphics is difficult for me to view with my slow connection here.
Google documents are always difficult for me to edit. Google assumes that everyone has very fast connections and modern machines. I have neither. It put me into "suggestion mode", which is actually very clever of them... if only I had a fast connection!
Bear in mind, that while I am a native speaker of English and have actually done quite a bit of writing, I am NOT an IT expert. So.... take any suggestions I give you with caution. I could be misunderstanding your intent.
I will look at this again tomorrow when I am not half asleep. Neighbor's cattle (Herfords, two heifers, a calf and a 1,200 pound bull) got out onto the road this evening. I and former US Congressman Alan Lasee helped a police officer and the owner get them back into the enclosure. Was quite enough excitement for me!
Dale
On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:14 PM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez@redhat.com
wrote:
Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and after that I will need a review.
In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :)
You just need to access the document in this URL
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1FMD...
Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will receive a notification to give you the permissions.
If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell me because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox.
Again thanks.
P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very communicative of your current mood :P
P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you will be able to see it after receiving this.
On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby daleraby@gmail.com wrote:
Senor Gutierrez:
I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic issues. I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is limited to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days.
I need permission to access your document though.
Dale
On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez < ogutierrez@redhat.com> wrote:
Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can
separate
them into more "atomic" pieces :)
Thanks for reviewing!
On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields stickster@gmail.com
wrote:
> On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <
ogutierrez@redhat.com>
> wrote: > > > > Hi there. > > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul
for
> review. > > > > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_ Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing > > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as
English
is > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most welcome. > > Hi Oliver, > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run
like
> this: > > * What is FC and how do you install it? > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a profile > > -- > Paul > _______________________________________________ Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@lists.fedoraproject.org To unsubscribe send an email to
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