Re: Article draft: Fleet Commander

[Oliver Gutierrez]

Thank you very much Dale!

I know my grammar is not very good, but I continue learning :)

Thanks for all the tips and explainations about my mistakes. I value them
the most and I'm learning a lot.

I will apply the changes to the document and after that I will probably cut
it in two parts. The setup and the usage.

Will come back with news! Thanks and cheers!

On Wed, Jun 27, 2018 at 3:23 AM Dale Raby  wrote:
> Hi Oliver,
>
> I opened your .txt article in LibreOffice Writer, made notes for you in
> red, the saved the altered document with a .odt filename extension.  Mostly
> it reads coherently and an English speaker might find some of the phrasing
> a little unusual, but he would understand most of it.  Even us Anglos don't
> always agree on how to say some things.
>
> All in all, its a well-written article.
>
> On Tue, Jun 26, 2018 at 4:45 AM, Oliver Gutierrez 
> wrote:
> > Thank you very much Dale. I'm fixing the whole things you pointed. Almost
> > all of them make sense from the IT part. :)
> >
> > I will finish the modifications maybe today or tomorrown and I will
> > change the document to a text document so you can review it better :)
> >
> > Thanks for your help and your time!
> >
> > On Sat, Jun 23, 2018 at 4:53 AM Dale Raby  wrote:
> > > Just put in some suggestions.  Your English is better than my Spanish
> > > but I found a few minor grammatical errors.
> > >
> > > The biggest problem I found was that there seems to be a large block of
> > > text that is a duplication.  The section with the graphics is difficult for
> > > me to view with my slow connection here.
> > >
> > > Google documents are always difficult for me to edit.  Google assumes
> > > that everyone has very fast connections and modern machines.  I have
> > > neither.  It put me into "suggestion mode", which is actually very clever
> > > of them... if only I had a fast connection!
> > >
> > > Bear in mind, that while I am a native speaker of English and have
> > > actually done quite a bit of writing, I am NOT an IT expert.  So.... take
> > > any suggestions I give you with caution.  I could be misunderstanding your
> > > intent.
> > >
> > > I will look at this again tomorrow when I am not half asleep.
> > > Neighbor's cattle (Herfords, two heifers, a calf and a 1,200 pound bull)
> > > got out onto the road this evening.  I and former US Congressman Alan Lasee
> > > helped a police officer and the owner get them back into the enclosure.
> > > Was quite enough excitement for me!
> > >
> > > Dale
> > >
> > > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:14 PM, Oliver Gutierrez <[e-mail]
> > > > wrote:
> > > > Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in
> > > > sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and after
> > > > that I will need a review.
> > > >
> > > > In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :)
> > > >
> > > > You just need to access the document in this URL
> > > >
> > > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1FMD...
> > > >
> > > > Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will
> > > > receive a notification to give you the permissions.
> > > >
> > > > If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell
> > > > me because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox.
> > > >
> > > > Again thanks.
> > > >
> > > > P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very communicative
> > > > of your current mood :P
> > > >
> > > > P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give
> > > > automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you will be
> > > > able to see it after receiving this.
> > > >
> > > > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby  wrote:
> > > > > Senor Gutierrez:
> > > > >
> > > > > I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic
> > > > > issues.  I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is
> > > > > limited
> > > > > to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days.
> > > > >
> > > > > I need permission to access your document though.
> > > > >
> > > > > Dale
> > > > >
> > > > > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <
> > > > > [e-mail]>
> > > > > wrote:
> > > > > > Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can
> > > > >
> > > > > separate
> > > > > > them into more "atomic" pieces :)
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Thanks for reviewing!
> > > > > >
> > > > > > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields
> > > > >
> > > > > wrote:
> > > > > > > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <
> > > > >
> > > > > [e-mail]>
> > > > > > > wrote:
> > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > Hi there.
> > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul
> > > > >
> > > > > for
> > > > > > > review.
> > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_
> > > > > > Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing
> > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as
> > > > >
> > > > > English
> > > > > > is
> > > > > > > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most
> > > > > > welcome.
> > > > > > >
> > > > > > > Hi Oliver,
> > > > > > >
> > > > > > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too
> > > > > > > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it
> > > > > > > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you
> > > > > > > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run
> > > > >
> > > > > like
> > > > > > > this:
> > > > > > >
> > > > > > > * What is FC and how do you install it?
> > > > > > > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a profile
> > > > > > >
> > > > > > > --
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> > > > > > >
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