Re: Article draft: Fleet Commander

[Oliver Gutierrez]

Thank you very much Dale!

I know my grammar is not very good, but I continue learning :)

Thanks for all the tips and explainations about my mistakes. I value them
the most and I'm learning a lot.

I will apply the changes to the document and after that I will probably cut
it in two parts. The setup and the usage.

Will come back with news! Thanks and cheers!

On Wed, Jun 27, 2018 at 3:23 AM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com&gt; wrote:

>  Hi Oliver,
>
>  I opened your .txt article in LibreOffice Writer, made notes for you in
>  red, the saved the altered document with a .odt filename extension.  Mostly
>  it reads coherently and an English speaker might find some of the phrasing
>  a little unusual, but he would understand most of it.  Even us Anglos don't
>  always agree on how to say some things.
>
>  All in all, its a well-written article.
>
>  On Tue, Jun 26, 2018 at 4:45 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
>  wrote:
>
> > Thank you very much Dale. I'm fixing the whole things you pointed. Almost
> > all of them make sense from the IT part. :)
> >
> > I will finish the modifications maybe today or tomorrown and I will
> > change the document to a text document so you can review it better :)
> >
> > Thanks for your help and your time!
> >
> > On Sat, Jun 23, 2018 at 4:53 AM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com&gt; wrote:
> >
> >> Just put in some suggestions.  Your English is better than my Spanish
> >> but I found a few minor grammatical errors.
> >>
> >> The biggest problem I found was that there seems to be a large block of
> >> text that is a duplication.  The section with the graphics is difficult for
> >> me to view with my slow connection here.
> >>
> >> Google documents are always difficult for me to edit.  Google assumes
> >> that everyone has very fast connections and modern machines.  I have
> >> neither.  It put me into "suggestion mode", which is actually very
> clever
> >> of them... if only I had a fast connection!
> >>
> >> Bear in mind, that while I am a native speaker of English and have
> >> actually done quite a bit of writing, I am NOT an IT expert.  So.... take
> >> any suggestions I give you with caution.  I could be misunderstanding your
> >> intent.
> >>
> >> I will look at this again tomorrow when I am not half asleep.
> >> Neighbor's cattle (Herfords, two heifers, a calf and a 1,200 pound bull)
> >> got out onto the road this evening.  I and former US Congressman Alan Lasee
> >> helped a police officer and the owner get them back into the enclosure.
> >> Was quite enough excitement for me!
> >>
> >> Dale
> >>
> >> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:14 PM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com
> >> > wrote:
> >>
> >>> Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in
> >>> sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and after
> >>> that I will need a review.
> >>>
> >>> In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :)
> >>>
> >>> You just need to access the document in this URL
> >>>
> >>>
> >>>
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1...
> >>>
> >>> Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will
> >>> receive a notification to give you the permissions.
> >>>
> >>> If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell
> >>> me because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox.
> >>>
> >>> Again thanks.
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very communicative
> >>> of your current mood :P
> >>>
> >>> P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give
> >>> automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you will be
> >>> able to see it after receiving this.
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com&gt; wrote:
> >>>
> >>>> Senor Gutierrez:
> >>>>
> >>>> I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic
> >>>> issues.  I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is
> >>>> limited
> >>>> to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days.
> >>>>
> >>>> I need permission to access your document though.
> >>>>
> >>>> Dale
> >>>>
> >>>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <
> >>>> ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
> >>>> wrote:
> >>>>
> >>>> > Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can
> >>>> separate
> >>>> > them into more "atomic" pieces :)
> >>>> >
> >>>> > Thanks for reviewing!
> >>>> >
> >>>> >
> >>>> > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields
> <stickster(a)gmail.com&gt;
> >>>> wrote:
> >>>> >
> >>>> > > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <
> >>>> ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
> >>>> > > wrote:
> >>>> > > >
> >>>> > > > Hi there.
> >>>> > > >
> >>>> > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to
> Paul
> >>>> for
> >>>> > > review.
> >>>> > > >
> >>>> > > >
> >>>> > >
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_
> >>>> > Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing
> >>>> > > >
> >>>> > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and
> as
> >>>> English
> >>>> > is
> >>>> > > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is
> most
> >>>> > welcome.
> >>>> > >
> >>>> > > Hi Oliver,
> >>>> > >
> >>>> > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is
> just too
> >>>> > > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like
> it
> >>>> > > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can
> you
> >>>> > > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could
> run
> >>>> like
> >>>> > > this:
> >>>> > >
> >>>> > > * What is FC and how do you install it?
> >>>> > > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a
> profile
> >>>> > >
> >>>> > > --
> >>>> > > Paul
> >>>> > >
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