Article draft: Fleet Commander

[Oliver Gutierrez]

Hi there.

Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul for review.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1...

Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as English is
not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most welcome.

[Paul Frields]

On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt; wrote:
>  Hi there.
>
>  Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul for review.
>
>
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1...
>
>  Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as English is
>  not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most welcome. 
Hi Oliver,

There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too
long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it
might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you
consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run like
this:

* What is FC and how do you install it?
* Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a profile

-- 
Paul

[Oliver Gutierrez]

Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can separate
them into more "atomic" pieces :)

Thanks for reviewing!


On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields <stickster(a)gmail.com&gt; wrote:

>  On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez
> <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
>  wrote:
>  >
>  > Hi there.
>  >
>  > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul for
>  review.
>  >
>  >
>
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1...
>  >
>  > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as English is
>  > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most welcome.
>
>  Hi Oliver,
>
>  There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too
>  long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it
>  might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you
>  consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run like
>  this:
>
>  * What is FC and how do you install it?
>  * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a profile
>
>  --
>  Paul
>

[Dale Raby]

Senor Gutierrez:

I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic
issues.  I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is limited
to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days.

I need permission to access your document though.

Dale

On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
wrote:

>  Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can
> separate
>  them into more "atomic" pieces :)
>
>  Thanks for reviewing!
>
>
>  On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields <stickster(a)gmail.com&gt; wrote:
>
>  > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
>  > wrote:
>  > >
>  > > Hi there.
>  > >
>  > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul for
>  > review.
>  > >
>  > >
>  > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_
>  Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing
>  > >
>  > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as English
>  is
>  > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most
>  welcome.
>  >
>  > Hi Oliver,
>  >
>  > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too
>  > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it
>  > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you
>  > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run like
>  > this:
>  >
>  > * What is FC and how do you install it?
>  > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a profile
>  >
>  > --
>  > Paul
>  >
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[Oliver Gutierrez]

Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in
sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and after
that I will need a review.

In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :)

You just need to access the document in this URL

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1...

Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will receive a
notification to give you the permissions.

If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell me
because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox.

Again thanks.


P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very communicative of
your current mood :P

P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give
automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you will be
able to see it after receiving this.


On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com&gt; wrote:

>  Senor Gutierrez:
>
>  I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic
>  issues.  I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is limited
>  to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days.
>
>  I need permission to access your document though.
>
>  Dale
>
>  On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com&gt;
>  wrote:
>
>  > Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can separate
>  > them into more "atomic" pieces :)
>  >
>  > Thanks for reviewing!
>  >
>  >
>  > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields <stickster(a)gmail.com&gt;
>  wrote:
>  >
>  > > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com
>  >
>  > > wrote:
>  > > >
>  > > > Hi there.
>  > > >
>  > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul for
>  > > review.
>  > > >
>  > > >
>  > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_
>  > Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing
>  > > >
>  > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as English
>  > is
>  > > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most
>  > welcome.
>  > >
>  > > Hi Oliver,
>  > >
>  > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too
>  > > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it
>  > > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you
>  > > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run like
>  > > this:
>  > >
>  > > * What is FC and how do you install it?
>  > > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a profile
>  > >
>  > > --
>  > > Paul
>  > >
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