[New pitch] Smart lighting solution with Arduino on Fedora 22 [Review Required]

[Sumantro Mukherjee]

Hey All,

I have drafted a post which is on the IoT and how easily we can get started with it. I have made this as a POC with bare min and kept it very simple for easy understanding of readers.

https://fedoramagazine.org/wp-admin/post.php?post=13254&action=edit

I would like someone to help me out with the review !

Thanks
Sumantro

[Marketing] Re: [New pitch] Smart lighting solution with Arduino on Fedora 22 [Review Required]

[Huiren Woo]

Hey Sumantro,

I gave a look through the article. Great topic and you have covered it
pretty well! You've also taken the effort to put in screenshots which
provides an excellent visual guide. It looks like it wasn't completed
yet and still a draft.

However, there are some formatting issues and some grammar errors. To
nitpick a little, you might wanna say 'sudo dnf install xxx -y'
instead. Other than that, it is very neat!

Best Regards,
Woo Huiren
Fedora Ambassador & Marketing | Open Organization Ambassador

https://twitter.com/woohuiren

[Marketing] Re: [New pitch] Smart lighting solution with Arduino on Fedora 22 [Review Required]

[Justin W. Flory]

On 06/07/2016 04:26 AM, Sumantro Mukherjee wrote:
> Hey All,
>
> I have drafted a post which is on the IoT and how easily we can get started with it. I have made this as a POC with bare min and kept it very simple for easy understanding of readers.
>
> https://fedoramagazine.org/wp-admin/post.php?post=13254&action=edit
>
> I would like someone to help me out with the review !

Hi Sumantro,

I just took some time to review and edit the article. Overall, I think 
this is a pretty good piece and shows off some of the cool things you 
can do with Fedora and Arduino!

There were a few comments / questions I had while reading the article, 
and I inserted little <!-- comments --> with questions that I thought 
could be explained a little more or maybe go into a little more detail. 
One thing I was a little confused about while reading was what exactly 
jonny-five and narf do, for example. It might be a good idea to explain 
to the readers what those are, how they work, and how they allow us to 
control the light switch.

You can see a public preview of the article here:

https://fedoramagazine.org/?p=13254&preview=1&_ppp=dc2025ae28

Also, one more tip when writing posts, it might be easier if you can 
start the draft inside of the Magazine - it seems like the editor you 
were using copied in a lot of <div> <span> and other tags that make it 
tricky for WordPress to format. I had to spend some extra time removing 
those from the article for it to display normally. It will be 
time-saving for myself and other editors when new pitches / drafts are 
started as new articles within Fedora Magazine itself.

Thanks for submitting this article, and let me know what you think of 
the edits! Thanks for your time on this one.

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Cheers,
Justin W. Flory
[e-mail]