On Tue, Dec 02, 2014 at 11:00:17AM -0600, Joe Brockmeier wrote:
On 12/02/2014 10:49 AM, Paul W. Frields wrote:
> As you guys are crafting improved notes, for better consistency, it
> would be great to write in present tense about the release.
>
> INCONSISTENT: "Fedora 21 Foobar will include special flavor crystals
> that defy gravity and help you fly like Superman."
>
> CONSISTENT: "Fedora 21 Foobar includes special flavor crystals that
> defy gravity and help you fly like Superman."
Be sure to use passive voice too. Paul likes that.[1]
Best,
jzb
[1] May not be entirely true. Consult your attorney. Offer not valid in
Utah.
Passive voice is not liked by me! Oh, wait... ;-)
Just to clarify -- I think much of the current announcement dervies,
from Alpha/Beta so it's natural it reads in future tense. I just
figured to get a head start on the rewrite as it comes from multiple
people. :-D
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