Workstation text on Fedora.next website

[Paul W. Frields]

On Wed, Nov 12, 2014 at 12:42:27PM -0600, Michael Catanzaro wrote:
> Oooh, good job, marketing folks.

Courtesy several contributors, including Robert Mayr, Ricky Elrod, Mo
Duffy, and Ryan Lerch.

I had another email that I think pulls in lots of your finds/fixes
here, but wanted to address additionally the following:

> On Wed, 2014-11-12 at 11:55 -0500, Paul W. Frields wrote:
> * Nitpick: stylistically, I don't like the ampersand in "hobbyists &
> students," that's not really typical or expected. Simply writing out
> "and" would look better. [1] has some guidance on when to use these.

Agreed, we'll fix that.

> * "Fedora Workstation is a reliable, user-friendly, and powerful
> operating system for laptops and PC hardware." This is a little
> confusing. Is a laptop not "PC hardware?" Does this mean I can run
> Fedora on any laptop, but only desktops that came pre-installed with
> Windows? ("I'm a Mac, and I'm a PC" teaches us that the world is divided
> between PCs and Macs, after all.) So it might be better to say
> "...operating system for laptop and desktop computers" or something
> along those lines instead.

OK, I buy this, but what about even more friendly: "Fedora Workstation
is a reliable, user-friendly, and powerful operating system for your
laptop or dekstop computer."


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