marketing-content/FC-5-press-release fc5-press-release-en_US.xml, 1.2, 1.3

Karsten Wade (kwade) fedora-docs-commits at redhat.com
Thu Mar 16 00:47:43 UTC 2006


Author: kwade

Update of /cvs/docs/marketing-content/FC-5-press-release
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv15386

Modified Files:
	fc5-press-release-en_US.xml 
Log Message:
Final edit, minor grammar and brevity clean ups, link to relnotes top center.


Index: fc5-press-release-en_US.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/marketing-content/FC-5-press-release/fc5-press-release-en_US.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.2
retrieving revision 1.3
diff -u -r1.2 -r1.3
--- fc5-press-release-en_US.xml	16 Mar 2006 00:07:47 -0000	1.2
+++ fc5-press-release-en_US.xml	16 Mar 2006 00:47:35 -0000	1.3
@@ -8,18 +8,26 @@
   <para>
     The Fedora Project is pleased to announce the release of Fedora Core 5.  New
     desktop applications, advances in security, better localization tools,
-    improved software installation and management facilities and strong Java
+    improved software installation and management facilities, and strong Java
     integration help to make Fedora Core 5 the most innovative Linux
     distribution ever. 
   </para>
+  <para>
+    For a more complete list of changes and interesting information for users,
+    administrators, and developers, refer to the latest release notes:
+  </para>
+  <para>
+    <ulink url="http://fedora.redhat.com/docs/release-notes/"/>
+  </para>
+  
   <header>Getting Fedora Core 5</header>
   <header>Download ISO Images</header>
   <para>
     Users can download the ISO images of the installation DVD or CD-ROMs now
-    from the Fedora web site. 
+    from the Fedora Website. 
   </para>
   <para>
-          <ulink
+    <ulink
       url='http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/Download'>http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/Download</ulink>
   </para>
   <header>Online Vendors</header>
@@ -260,8 +268,8 @@
   <header>Internationalization and Localization</header>
   <para>
     Fedora contributors speak many different languages besides C, C++, Python,
-    Java, and so on.  We are also humans who speak the world's many different
-    languages, and we all want Fedora to support as many as possible.    
+    Java, and so on.  We are also humans who speak the world's languages, and we
+    want Fedora to support as many as possible.
   </para>
   <para>
     In Fedora Core 5, we have come closer to that goal by adopting SCIM, in
@@ -364,8 +372,8 @@
   </para>
   <para>
     Fedora Core 5 also offers technology previews for SystemTap and Frysk,
-    cutting edge execution analysis tools that will allow developers to
-    troubleshoot performance issues to a degree never before possible.  
+    cutting edge execution analysis tools that allow developers to troubleshoot
+    performance issues to a degree never before possible.
   </para>
   <para>
     <ulink
@@ -379,9 +387,9 @@
   <header>The Future of Fedora</header>
   <para>
     Fedora contributors are already working toward the next release of Fedora
-    Core, which will feature advancements in Xen, and new integration work from
+    Core, which features advancements in Xen, and new integration work from
     the Fedora Rendering and One Laptop Per Child (a.k.a. $100 laptop) projects.
-    Stateless Linux work is also progressing steadily. We are working on the
+    Stateless Linux work is also progressing steadily.  We are working on the
     ability to support Fedora Extras and other custom software repositories
     during installation.  As usual, work continues on new releases of the best
     and most robust free and open source software.  See our roadmap at:  




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