7 commits - en-US/AmateurRadio.xml en-US/Desktop.xml en-US/Devel-Runtime.xml en-US/Devel-Tools.xml en-US/ElectronicDesignAssistants.xml en-US/FileSystems.xml en-US/Installer.xml en-US/Networking.xml en-US/SystemDaemons.xml en-US/Virtualization.xml

Karsten Wade quaid at fedoraproject.org
Thu Apr 2 20:23:05 UTC 2009


 en-US/AmateurRadio.xml               |    2 -
 en-US/Desktop.xml                    |    4 +-
 en-US/Devel-Runtime.xml              |    2 -
 en-US/Devel-Tools.xml                |    8 ++---
 en-US/ElectronicDesignAssistants.xml |   53 +++++++++++++++++------------------
 en-US/FileSystems.xml                |    2 -
 en-US/Installer.xml                  |    2 -
 en-US/Networking.xml                 |    6 +--
 en-US/SystemDaemons.xml              |    4 +-
 en-US/Virtualization.xml             |    2 -
 10 files changed, 43 insertions(+), 42 deletions(-)

New commits:
commit c28c241fb7ab1927d95012e4dd9dd3fc2fc8de37
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 13:22:43 2009 -0700

    Fixing spelling and some markup I found.

diff --git a/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml b/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml
index 5343af7..04530fe 100644
--- a/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml
+++ b/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@
 				<itemizedlist>
 					<listitem>
 						<para>
-							Tclspice simulator library has been merged with ngspice. Now you can compile ngapice or tclspice by asserting a configure switch. See README.tcl
+							Tclspice simulator library has been merged with ngspice. Now you can compile ngspice or tclspice by asserting a configure switch. See README.tcl
 						</para>
 					</listitem>
 					<listitem>
diff --git a/en-US/Devel-Runtime.xml b/en-US/Devel-Runtime.xml
index ee929a7..b73f2f2 100644
--- a/en-US/Devel-Runtime.xml
+++ b/en-US/Devel-Runtime.xml
@@ -31,7 +31,7 @@
       <term>bash</term>
       <listitem>
 	<para>
-	  Fedora 11 incldes <package>bash</package> 4.0.  This is a
+	  Fedora 11 includes <package>bash</package> 4.0.  This is a
 	  significant upgrade with new features.
 	</para>
       </listitem>
diff --git a/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml b/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml
index 938369d..8a7111f 100644
--- a/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml
+++ b/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml
@@ -778,7 +778,7 @@
 	      </listitem>
 	      <listitem>
 		<para>
-		  The revision view shows avatars retreived from Gravatar. 
+		  The revision view shows avatars retrieved from Gravatar. 
 		</para>
 	      </listitem>
 	    </itemizedlist>
@@ -883,7 +883,7 @@
 		  New <command>automate lua</command> command with
 		  which <package>lua</package> functions, like
 		  <package>monotone</package> hooks, can be called
-		  over automate. This is particularily useful to get
+		  over automate. This is particularly useful to get
 		  user defaults, like ignorable files, branch keys and
 		  passwords, which are managed through one or more
 		  monotonerc files.
diff --git a/en-US/FileSystems.xml b/en-US/FileSystems.xml
index 74f9422..6f8f8d2 100644
--- a/en-US/FileSystems.xml
+++ b/en-US/FileSystems.xml
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@
         <section>
         	<title>Ext4 - The default file system</title>
         	<para>
-			Fedora 11 utilizes ext4 as the deafult file system. ext4 brings significant new features and performance enhancements including:
+			Fedora 11 utilizes ext4 as the default file system. ext4 brings significant new features and performance enhancements including:
         		<itemizedlist>
         			<listitem>
         				<para>
diff --git a/en-US/Networking.xml b/en-US/Networking.xml
index 695ae2e..339064e 100644
--- a/en-US/Networking.xml
+++ b/en-US/Networking.xml
@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@
 	  at cache poisoning, for example via a Kaminsky Attack, then the
 	  enduser will not be given this forged/spoofed data. DNSSEC
 	  deployment is gaining speed rapidly, and is a crucial part
-	  and the next logical step to make the internet more secure
+	  and the next logical step to make the Internet more secure
 	  for end users. DLV is used to add DNSSEC signed domains
 	  into TLD's that themselves are not yet signed, such as
 	  .com and .org.
diff --git a/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml b/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml
index 7dbde39..f705822 100644
--- a/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml
+++ b/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml
@@ -89,7 +89,7 @@
 	    </listitem>
 	    <listitem>
 	      <para>
-		Intel Matrix - The metadata used by recent Intel ICH controlers.
+		Intel Matrix - The metadata used by recent Intel ICH controllers.
 	      </para>
 	    </listitem>
 	  </itemizedlist>
diff --git a/en-US/Virtualization.xml b/en-US/Virtualization.xml
index 63fda92..282f7de 100644
--- a/en-US/Virtualization.xml
+++ b/en-US/Virtualization.xml
@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ For further details refer to the <ulink type="http" url="https://fedoraproject.o
 	<section>
 		<title>KVM PCI Device Assignment</title>
 		<para>
-			Fedora 11 expands its virtualization capabilities to include KVM PCI device assignment support. KVM users can now give virtual machines exclusive access to physical PCI devices using Fedora's virtualization toools, including the Virtual Machine Manager application. 
+			Fedora 11 expands its virtualization capabilities to include KVM PCI device assignment support. KVM users can now give virtual machines exclusive access to physical PCI devices using Fedora's virtualization tools, including the Virtual Machine Manager application. 
 		</para>
 		<note>
 		<para>


commit 69fd9f790c8e6ef526ce5c6ed5f611a113cf48cc
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 13:17:53 2009 -0700

    missing markup, that's not good

diff --git a/en-US/Desktop.xml b/en-US/Desktop.xml
index d117ca0..4ca23ad 100644
--- a/en-US/Desktop.xml
+++ b/en-US/Desktop.xml
@@ -55,10 +55,10 @@
 	      <term>Root User disabled for GNOME Display Manager</term>
 	      <listitem>
 		<para>
-		  Root user is disabled by defaulf for GNOME Display
+		  Root user is disabled by default for GNOME Display
 		  Manager (GDM) from Fedora 10 onwards. We strongly
 		  recommend that you avoid logging in as root user and
-		  instead use su - or sudo for running commands
+		  instead use <command>su -c</command> or <command>sudo</command> for running commands
 		  requiring root access. If you wish to revert this
 		  setting however, refer to <ulink type="http"
 		  url="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Enabling_Root_User_For_GNOME_Display_Manager">


commit c58d4f25a9cf43f319025e968cce7469d9ec4245
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 13:10:58 2009 -0700

    en-US spelling by default

diff --git a/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml b/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml
index f1fc651..938369d 100644
--- a/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml
+++ b/en-US/Devel-Tools.xml
@@ -762,7 +762,7 @@
 	      </listitem>
 	      <listitem>
 		<para>
-		  The file browing view was restored and has
+		  The file browsing view was restored and has
 		  annotation support now.
 		</para>
 	      </listitem>
@@ -1309,7 +1309,7 @@
 	      </listitem>
 	      <listitem>
 		<para>
-		  Optimisation feature for objects returned by value
+		  Optimization feature for objects returned by value
 		</para>
 	      </listitem>
 	      <listitem>


commit 4a44309b0c4158f517cf22d438240b228e18fcd8
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 13:08:13 2009 -0700

    Fixed language and markup.
    
    The original conversion missed several items:
    
    * Language edits for clarity and proper English usage;
    * Edits for style as per Docs Project style guide;
    * Lack of markup e.g. for packages

diff --git a/en-US/ElectronicDesignAssistants.xml b/en-US/ElectronicDesignAssistants.xml
index b819c2c..81aaafc 100644
--- a/en-US/ElectronicDesignAssistants.xml
+++ b/en-US/ElectronicDesignAssistants.xml
@@ -10,8 +10,8 @@
     Fedora Electronic Lab is Fedora's high-end hardware design and
     simulation platform. This platform provides different hardware
     design flows based on the semiconductor industry's current
-    trend. FEL maps in three methodologies {design, simulation and
-    verification} with opensource EDA software.
+    trend. FEL maps in three methodologies {design, simulation, and
+    verification} with open source EDA software.
   </para>
 
   <para>
@@ -25,20 +25,20 @@
   </para>
 
   <para>
-    The perl modules included for F11 brings a new methodology under
-    the Fedora umbrella. This methodology is Verification together
+    The Perl modules included for F11 bring a new methodology under
+    the Fedora umbrella. This methodology is verification together
     with possibilities for co-simulation based design and
-    simulation. Fedora remains the sole linux distribution
-    distributing FEL methodologies for hardware design, simulation and
-    verification.
+    simulation. Fedora remains the sole Linux distribution
+    distributing FEL methodologies for hardware design, simulation,
+    and verification.
   </para>
 
   <para>
     Updates of the existing RPM packages have improved design
     experience in terms of development time and debugging. While FEL
     understands Moore's Law is important for its userbase, these
-    improvements will allow users to design a more efficient and
-    successful designs with opensource software.
+    improvements allow users to design a more efficient and
+    successful design with open source software.
   </para>
 
   <para>
@@ -48,16 +48,16 @@
   </para>
 
   <para>
-    FEL bridges 2 different opensource communities : 
+    FEL bridges 2 different open source communities : 
     <itemizedlist>
       <listitem>
 	<para>
-	  opensource software community
+	  open source software community
 	</para>
       </listitem>
       <listitem>
 	<para>
-	  opensource hardware community
+	  open source hardware community
 	</para>
       </listitem>
     </itemizedlist>
@@ -65,8 +65,8 @@
 
   <para>
     After 3 consecutive and successive releases, FEL/Fedora is
-    regarded as the Leader in this field by both communities due to
-    its 3-years experience and quality EDA solutions.
+    regarded as the leader in this field by both communities due to
+    its 3-years of experience and quality EDA solutions.
   </para>
 
   <para>
@@ -75,14 +75,15 @@
     <itemizedlist>
       <listitem>
 	<para>
-	  Perl modules to extend vhdl and verilog support. These perl
-	  modules together with rawhide's gtkwave improves chip
-	  testing support.
+	  Perl modules to extend <package>vhdl</package> and
+	  <package>verilog</package> support. These Perl modules
+	  together with rawhide's <package>gtkwave</package> improves
+	  chip testing support.
 	</para>
       </listitem>
       <listitem>
 	<para>
-	  Introduction of Verilog-AMS modeling into ngspice 
+	  Introduction of Verilog-AMS modeling into <package>ngspice</package> 
 	</para>
       </listitem>
       <listitem>
@@ -97,7 +98,7 @@
       </listitem>
       <listitem>
 	<para>
-	  Improved PLI support on both iverilog and ghdl 
+	  Improved PLI support on both <package>iverilog</package> and <package>ghdl</package> 
 	</para>
       </listitem>
       <listitem>
@@ -120,12 +121,12 @@
   </para>
 
   <para>
-    Users who are using the standard fedora live media and even 
-    <screen>
-      yum groupinstall 'Electronic Lab'
-    </screen>
-    to deploy this high-end hardware design, simulation and
-    verification platform.
+    Users are using the standard Fedora Live media or the "Electronic
+    Lab" <command>yum</command> group to deploy this high-end hardware
+    design, simulation, and verification platform.  To install run the
+    following command:
   </para>
-
+  <screen>
+    <command>su -c "yum groupinstall 'Electronic Lab'"</command>
+  </screen>
 </section>


commit 141503f0ed4d363223564b2330bd9a44e0cd9aea
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 12:56:00 2009 -0700

    eg should be e.g., but we really want to just say 'for example' for l10n simplicity sake

diff --git a/en-US/Networking.xml b/en-US/Networking.xml
index 5e91d1f..695ae2e 100644
--- a/en-US/Networking.xml
+++ b/en-US/Networking.xml
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@
 	  (such as .gov, .se, the ENUM zone and other TLD's) then
 	  that data will be cryptographically validated on the
 	  recursive DNS server. If validation fails, due to attempts
-	  at cache poisoning (eg via a Kaminsky Attack) then the
+	  at cache poisoning, for example via a Kaminsky Attack, then the
 	  enduser will not be given this forged/spoofed data. DNSSEC
 	  deployment is gaining speed rapidly, and is a crucial part
 	  and the next logical step to make the internet more secure


commit dc0852af624bfb18e951dde9523ce52973a93303
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 12:53:33 2009 -0700

    en-US spelling by default

diff --git a/en-US/Installer.xml b/en-US/Installer.xml
index 99061ed..2cb9fd5 100644
--- a/en-US/Installer.xml
+++ b/en-US/Installer.xml
@@ -42,7 +42,7 @@
 					</term>
 					<listitem>
 						<para>
-							<application>Anaconda</application> still presents you with the initial screen from previous versions that allows you to specify where <application>Anaconda</application> should install Fedora on your system. You can choose to use a whole drive, to remove existing Linux partitions, or to use the free space on the drive. However, <application>anaconda</application> now automatically sets the layout of the partitions and does not ask you to add or delete partitions or file systems from this basic layout. If you require a customised layout at installation time, you should perform a graphical installation over a VNC connection or a kickstart installation. More advanced options yet, such as LVM, encrypted filesystems, and resizable filesystems are still only available only in graphical mode and kickstart. 
+							<application>Anaconda</application> still presents you with the initial screen from previous versions that allows you to specify where <application>Anaconda</application> should install Fedora on your system. You can choose to use a whole drive, to remove existing Linux partitions, or to use the free space on the drive. However, <application>anaconda</application> now automatically sets the layout of the partitions and does not ask you to add or delete partitions or file systems from this basic layout. If you require a customized layout at installation time, you should perform a graphical installation over a VNC connection or a kickstart installation. More advanced options yet, such as LVM, encrypted filesystems, and resizable filesystems are still only available only in graphical mode and kickstart. 
 						</para>
 					</listitem>
 				</varlistentry>


commit aa00d5ceb095c211025f1999d7240e24d2382aed
Author: Karsten Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Apr 2 12:48:28 2009 -0700

    en-US is the default spelling

diff --git a/en-US/Networking.xml b/en-US/Networking.xml
index bf5785b..5e91d1f 100644
--- a/en-US/Networking.xml
+++ b/en-US/Networking.xml
@@ -14,7 +14,7 @@
 	  Bind and unbound (recursive DNS servers) now enable DNSSEC
 	  validation in their default configuration. DNSSEC
 	  Lookaside Verification (DLV) is also enabled with the
-	  dlv.sc.org DLV Registry. This behaviour can be modified in
+	  dlv.sc.org DLV Registry. This behavior can be modified in
 	  /etc/sysconfig/dnssec by changing the DNSSEC and DLV
 	  settings.
 	</para>
diff --git a/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml b/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml
index 202269e..7dbde39 100644
--- a/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml
+++ b/en-US/SystemDaemons.xml
@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@
       <term>Power Management</term>
       <listitem>
 	<para>	  
-	  In order to allow users to monitor the behaviour of their
+	  In order to allow users to monitor the behavior of their
 	  systems and to improve power consumption in general, several
 	  improvements were done for Fedora 11:
 	  <itemizedlist>





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