[install-guide] Various proofing and logic corrections
Jack Reed
jjr at fedoraproject.org
Mon Jan 14 05:03:23 UTC 2013
commit f164a8123c22461d25395d3fa368beaeb143d6ca
Author: Jack Reed <jreed at redhat.com>
Date: Mon Jan 14 15:03:00 2013 +1000
Various proofing and logic corrections
en-US/Account_Configuration_common-para-6.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Create_Software_RAID-common-note-1.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Graphical_Installation_install-hub.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Installation_Source-common-para-2.xml | 2 +-
.../Installation_Source-common-varlistentry-2.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Note_menu-options-greyed-out.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Package_Selection-x86.xml | 3 +--
en-US/Progress_Hub_common-para-3.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Reclaim_Space_common-para-2.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Time_Zone_common-para-2.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Write_changes_to_disk_common-para-1.xml | 2 +-
11 files changed, 11 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/en-US/Account_Configuration_common-para-6.xml b/en-US/Account_Configuration_common-para-6.xml
index e92c226..b7ace18 100644
--- a/en-US/Account_Configuration_common-para-6.xml
+++ b/en-US/Account_Configuration_common-para-6.xml
@@ -4,6 +4,6 @@
%BOOK_ENTITIES;
]>
<para>
- <!-- $Id: --> Enter the <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem> password into the <guilabel>Root Password</guilabel> field. Fedora displays the characters as asterisks for security. Type the same password into the <guilabel>Confirm</guilabel> field to ensure it is set correctly. After you set the root password, click <guibutton>Done</guibutton> to return to the Configuration Menu and Progress Screen.
+ <!-- $Id: --> Click the <guilabel>Root Password</guilabel> menu item and enter your nominated password into the <guilabel>Root Password</guilabel> field. Fedora displays the characters as asterisks for security. Type the same password into the <guilabel>Confirm</guilabel> field to ensure it is set correctly. After you set the root password, click <guibutton>Done</guibutton> to return to the Configuration Menu and Progress Screen.
</para>
diff --git a/en-US/Create_Software_RAID-common-note-1.xml b/en-US/Create_Software_RAID-common-note-1.xml
index 0e50f62..c7d3e54 100644
--- a/en-US/Create_Software_RAID-common-note-1.xml
+++ b/en-US/Create_Software_RAID-common-note-1.xml
@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
]>
<important>
<para>
- If both <guilabel>Redundancy (mirror)</guilabel> and <guilabel>Optimized performance (stripe)</guilabel> are checked but only two disks are included in the RAID device (refer to step 4), the resulting device will have a RAID 1 rather than RAID 10 level of data security. A genuine RAID 10 device will only be created if four disks are included. If you still choose to create a level 10 RAID with only two disks, you can add additional disks or make other RAID modifications after installation using the <application>mdadm</application> utility.
+ If both <guilabel>Redundancy (mirror)</guilabel> and <guilabel>Optimized performance (stripe)</guilabel> are checked but only two disks are included in the RAID device (refer to step 4), the resulting device will have a RAID 1 rather than RAID 10 level of data security. A genuine RAID 10 device will only be created if four disks are included. If you still choose to create a level 10 RAID with only two disks, you can add additional disks and make other RAID modifications after installation using the <application>mdadm</application> utility.
</para>
</important>
diff --git a/en-US/Graphical_Installation_install-hub.xml b/en-US/Graphical_Installation_install-hub.xml
index 12af8e4..c463344 100644
--- a/en-US/Graphical_Installation_install-hub.xml
+++ b/en-US/Graphical_Installation_install-hub.xml
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@
Instead of directing you through consecutive screens, the Fedora installer allows you to configure your installation in the order you choose.
</para>
<para>
- Use your mouse to select a section. When you have completed configuring a section, or if you would like to complete that section later, click <guibutton>Done</guibutton>.
+ Use your mouse to select a menu item to configure a section of the installation. When you have completed configuring a section, or if you would like to complete that section later, click <guibutton>Done</guibutton>.
</para>
<para>
Only sections marked with a warning symbol are mandatory. A note at the bottom of the screen warns you that these sections must be completed before the installation can begin. The remaining sections are optional. Beneath each section's title, the current configuration is summarised. Using this you can determine whether you need to visit the section to configure it further.
diff --git a/en-US/Installation_Source-common-para-2.xml b/en-US/Installation_Source-common-para-2.xml
index e544656..b84b2b7 100644
--- a/en-US/Installation_Source-common-para-2.xml
+++ b/en-US/Installation_Source-common-para-2.xml
@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
%BOOK_ENTITIES;
]>
<para>
- In this section you can specify the location you would like to install Fedora from. Choose between locally available installation media (such as a DVD or an ISO file) or a network location.
+ In this section you can specify the location you want to install Fedora from. Choose between locally available installation media (such as a DVD or an ISO file) or a network location.
</para>
diff --git a/en-US/Installation_Source-common-varlistentry-2.xml b/en-US/Installation_Source-common-varlistentry-2.xml
index bf94852..6b59ce3 100644
--- a/en-US/Installation_Source-common-varlistentry-2.xml
+++ b/en-US/Installation_Source-common-varlistentry-2.xml
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@
<term>ISO file</term>
<listitem>
<para>
- If installation media has not been detected automatically or you want to use a different file as the installation media, specify a locally-stored ISO file. Select this option and browse to the file's location on your system. Click <guibutton>Verify</guibutton> to check that the file is suitable for installation.
+ If installation media has not been detected automatically, this option will be available for you to specify a locally-stored ISO file. Select this option and browse to the file's location on your system. Click <guibutton>Verify</guibutton> to check that the file is suitable for installation.
</para>
</listitem>
</varlistentry>
diff --git a/en-US/Note_menu-options-greyed-out.xml b/en-US/Note_menu-options-greyed-out.xml
index 161a8a1..f3efc75 100644
--- a/en-US/Note_menu-options-greyed-out.xml
+++ b/en-US/Note_menu-options-greyed-out.xml
@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
]>
<note>
<para>
- While related background tasks are being run, certain menu items will be temporarily greyed out and unavailable.
+ When related background tasks are being run, certain menu items may be temporarily grayed out and unavailable.
</para>
</note>
diff --git a/en-US/Package_Selection-x86.xml b/en-US/Package_Selection-x86.xml
index d541efa..4f7d18e 100644
--- a/en-US/Package_Selection-x86.xml
+++ b/en-US/Package_Selection-x86.xml
@@ -35,8 +35,7 @@
GNOME Desktop
KDE Plasma Workspaces --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-note-3.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
<!-- Only one desktop environment can be selected at install time --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-para-8.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
- <!-- Fedora will automatically install the base... --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-note-3.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
- <!-- Only one desktop environment can be selected at install time --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-para-9.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
+ <!-- Fedora will automatically install the base... --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-para-9.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
<!-- To specify add-ons for installation... --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-para-10.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
<!-- Once you have selected an environment... --> <xi:include href="Package_Selection_common-para-11.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" />
<!-- The packages that you select are not permanent... -->
diff --git a/en-US/Progress_Hub_common-para-3.xml b/en-US/Progress_Hub_common-para-3.xml
index 49b1859..19dce03 100644
--- a/en-US/Progress_Hub_common-para-3.xml
+++ b/en-US/Progress_Hub_common-para-3.xml
@@ -4,6 +4,6 @@
%BOOK_ENTITIES;
]>
<para>
- While the packages are being installed, more configuration is required. Above the installation progress bar are items that need to be configured for Fedora to be fully installed. These items can be configured either while the packages are being installed or afterwards, but you will not be able to complete the installation process until they have been configured.
+ While the packages are being installed, more configuration is required. Above the installation progress bar is the <guilabel>Root Password</guilabel> menu item. The root password can be configured either while the packages are being installed or afterwards, but you will not be able to complete the installation process until it has been configured.
</para>
diff --git a/en-US/Reclaim_Space_common-para-2.xml b/en-US/Reclaim_Space_common-para-2.xml
index 725960c..a72ad68 100644
--- a/en-US/Reclaim_Space_common-para-2.xml
+++ b/en-US/Reclaim_Space_common-para-2.xml
@@ -4,6 +4,6 @@
%BOOK_ENTITIES;
]>
<para>
- The existing filesystems Fedora has detected will be listed in a table as part of their respective disk. The <guilabel>Reclaimable Space</guilabel> column lists the space that could be reassigned to this installation. The <guilabel>Action</guilabel> column lists what action will be taken with the filesystem to reclaim space.
+ The existing filesystems Fedora has detected will be listed in a table as part of their respective disks. The <guilabel>Reclaimable Space</guilabel> column lists the space that could be reassigned to this installation. The <guilabel>Action</guilabel> column lists what action will be taken with the filesystem to reclaim space.
</para>
diff --git a/en-US/Time_Zone_common-para-2.xml b/en-US/Time_Zone_common-para-2.xml
index b2b3eb3..d106757 100644
--- a/en-US/Time_Zone_common-para-2.xml
+++ b/en-US/Time_Zone_common-para-2.xml
@@ -4,6 +4,6 @@
%BOOK_ENTITIES;
]>
<para>
- There are two ways for you to select your time zone:
+ There are two ways for you to select a city:
</para>
diff --git a/en-US/Write_changes_to_disk_common-para-1.xml b/en-US/Write_changes_to_disk_common-para-1.xml
index 73eaf1b..04e5140 100644
--- a/en-US/Write_changes_to_disk_common-para-1.xml
+++ b/en-US/Write_changes_to_disk_common-para-1.xml
@@ -4,6 +4,6 @@
%BOOK_ENTITIES;
]>
<para>
- When all required sections of the Installation Summary Menu have been completed, the yellow admonition at the bottom of the Hub screen will disappear and the <guibutton>Begin Installation</guibutton> button can be selected.
+ When all required sections of the Installation Summary Menu have been completed, the yellow admonition at the bottom of the menu screen will disappear and the <guibutton>Begin Installation</guibutton> button can be selected.
</para>
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