Release Notes Dedication

[Larry Cafiero]

 Ben is right on "it's" (should be its - the "it" possessive) and
about the semicolon. It should be "...great contributors: Dennis
Ritchie" (or it can even be "...great contributors, Dennis Ritchie"
but the colon adds emphasis).

But it's a good dedication.

Larry Cafiero



On Mon, Oct 24, 2011 at 7:40 AM, Ben Cotton <bcotton at fedoraproject.org> wrote:
> Looks great except I don't think the semicolon is appropriate. (Well,
> in the context of Dennis Ritchie, maybe we should include as many
> semicolons as possible?) I'm not really sure what the correct
> punctuation is, maybe it is the semicolon, but it just _feels_ wrong.
> Maybe a re-wording would be better? Also, the "it's" should be "its".
>
>  During the preparation of Fedora 16, the computing world lost Dennis
> Ritchie -- one of
>  its great contributors.
>
> Also, the last sentence should have a comma: "Thank you, Dennis."
>
> Content-wise, I think it's great. If I've missed any punctuation
> pedantry, I'm sure someone else will pick up the banner. :-)
>
>
> BC
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