Fedora 20 Release Announcement Draft 2

[Kevin Fenzi]

On Thu, 05 Dec 2013 10:45:15 -0600
Joe Brockmeier <jzb at redhat.com> wrote:

> On 12/05/2013 10:40 AM, Ruth Suehle wrote:
> > Made edits. Like ya do. :-)
> 
> Thanks! Would appreciate more eyeballs if anyone else wants to look it
> over

Looks overall great to me. ;) 

Some nitpicks (feel free to ignore): 

"Live Desktop DVD" seems weird. The Desktop live image is targeting a
1gb usb as far as I know... so perhaps "Live Desktop Image" ?

"free and open source operating system around every six months" reads
kind of weird to me. Perhaps: 
"free and open source operating system twice a year" 
(which actually wasn't true last year, but that was a weird one. ;) 

Or 'approximately' instead of 'around' ? Not sure. 

kevin
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