[Magazine] Article Edited and Ready for Final Review

Justin W. Flory jflory7 at gmail.com
Sun Feb 7 22:17:51 UTC 2016


On 02/07/2016 04:58 PM, charles profitt wrote:
> I did not want to change the substance in the article written by
> William, but I think the language could be softened.
> 
> ---- current ----
> Neville has a love-hate relationship with GNOME. All of his computers
> have it. The hate part comes from the changing nature of GNOME. The
> developers move functionality and do not do a good job of documenting
> where that feature went. Cross makes special note that the most
> annoying item is the “connect to server” function in Nautilus
> ----
> 
> ---- possible revision ----
> Neville has a love-hate relationship with GNOME. While all of his
> computer run Ghome there are times when his productivity is impacted
> due to changes in where features are located. One example is the
> connect to server function in Nautilus. Neville believes that the issue
> could easily be resolved with better documentation with regards to
> changes.
> ----
> 
> I think this keeps the substance roughly the same, but makes the
> message a bit more subtle.
> 
> Thoughts?

I'm personally +1 to this proposed revision. I think this is a better
compromise while still maintaining the original point intended by Neville.

Let's see if this sounds okay to Neville.

--
Cheers,
Justin W. Flory
jflory7 at gmail.com

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