Docs help requested for Feature Page Summary

[Susan Lauber]

On Wed, Feb 18, 2009 at 1:31 PM, John Poelstra <poelstra at redhat.com> wrote:

> Hi Docs People,
>
> I'm wondering of there are any people who would be willing to do their
> word-smithing magic on the text for this page:
> https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Releases/11/FeatureList
>

I made one quick pass a this from a general standpoint.


>
> This page gets a lot of exposure and is read by a lot of different
> audiences, including the media. I'd like to make sure it is understandable
> and reads as well as it can.  The summary that accompanies each feature name
> is particularly important. For the most part the summary comes directly from
> the individual feature page.
>

I'll need to read a few of the feature pages before I can help more, but I
see some candidates for updates :)

One recurring question:  Do the different audiences know what rebase is?
For example:
"Update Xfce to the upstream 4.6 release with many new improvements and
features." seems like a good clip
but " Rebase to Gnome 2.26"  maybe not so much.
I know that most of Fedora community should understand this description but
what about the other audiences that you are targeting with this page?

-Susan


>
> Thanks,
> John
>
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