[Fedora-spins] Thoughts on spins.fp.o one-line descriptions

[Aaron Faanes]

I think a few of the one-line descriptions on
http://spins.fedoraproject.org/ could be tweaked to provide a clearer
description of the spin, and I'm wondering if the list feels the same
way.

Here's ones that I like:
KDE - A complete, modern desktop built using the K Desktop Environment (KDE).
LXDE - A light, fast, less-resource hungry desktop environment.
Games - A perfect show-case of the best games available in Fedora.
XFCE - A complete, well-integrated Xfce desktop.
BrOffice - Brazilian localized spin that provides the legal brand for
OpenOffice.org in Brazil.
FEL - Fedora's high-end hardware design and simulation platform.

Here's ones that leave me wanting more:
Security - Security analysis tools.
SoaS - Discover. Reflect. Share. Learn.
Moblin -The future of the mobile internet.
Design - Open Creativity.

I wrote up some suggestions to provide some food for thought. Lots of
these are based on the extended descriptions. I included the current
one-liners for reference purposes:

SoaS - Discover. Reflect. Share. Learn.
SoaS - An child-oriented spin featuring the award-winning Sugar
Learning Platform.
SoaS - A environment tailored for kids, featuring the award-winning
Sugar Learning Platform.
SoaS - A environment for kids.
SoaS - Fedora for kids, built on Sugar.
SoaS - Fedora for kids, powered by Sugar.
SoaS - Fedora for kids, built on the Sugar Learning Platform.
(For this one, could it be called "Sugar"? When I read SoaS, I think
of SaaS. Maybe I'm dyslexic. ;) )

Moblin - The future of the mobile internet.
Moblin - An environment designed with the mobile user in mind.
Moblin - Designed with the mobile user in mind.
Moblin - An elegant, lightweight desktop designed for the mobile user.

Design - Open Creativity.
Design - A suite brimming with multimedia production and publishing tools
Design - Multimedia production and publishing tools.
Design - Fedora custom-made for the creative user.

The originals for these spins seem a bit too vague for me. Some of my
suggestions also seem to be that way, too, but I think they could be
tweaked to reveal more of what they are.

Security - Security analysis tools.
Security - An environment for security auditing & forensics, system
recovery, and learning.
Security - A security toolkit for auditing, forensics, recovery, and testing.
Security - A security toolkit.
Security - A Swiss army knife for all things security.

After writing some of these, the security one might be better than the
ones I wrote. The name of the spin suggests to me that it's a hardened
version of Fedora, so I think the one-liner should make it clear that
it's meant as a toolkit as well as being secure. I think my main
concern with it is that it's rather short.

BrOffice's one-liner is one that I'm not sure about since I'm not sure
what the legal brand of OpenOffice is. That might be because I'm not
from Brazil ;) Could this be clarified as well? ;)

I have a personal preference for ones that have a good balance of
flair and information. I also like ones that complete the sentence
"This is a spin that provides ... " in an interesting, but specific,
way.
What do you guys think?

(Sorry in advance if this should have gone to the websites mailing
list instead ;) )

-- Aaron Faanes