Final release announcement coordination

Paul W. Frields stickster at gmail.com
Wed Dec 3 19:04:19 UTC 2014


On Tue, Dec 02, 2014 at 11:00:17AM -0600, Joe Brockmeier wrote:
> On 12/02/2014 10:49 AM, Paul W. Frields wrote:
> > As you guys are crafting improved notes, for better consistency, it
> > would be great to write in present tense about the release.
> > 
> >   INCONSISTENT: "Fedora 21 Foobar will include special flavor crystals
> >   that defy gravity and help you fly like Superman."
> > 
> >   CONSISTENT: "Fedora 21 Foobar includes special flavor crystals that
> >   defy gravity and help you fly like Superman."
> 
> Be sure to use passive voice too. Paul likes that.[1]
> 
> Best,
> 
> jzb
> 
> [1] May not be entirely true. Consult your attorney. Offer not valid in
> Utah.

Passive voice is not liked by me!  Oh, wait... ;-)

Just to clarify -- I think much of the current announcement dervies,
from Alpha/Beta so it's natural it reads in future tense.  I just
figured to get a head start on the rewrite as it comes from multiple
people. :-D

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