Author: pfrields
Update of /cvs/docs/readme-burning-isos/devel/en_US
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv10112/en_US
Modified Files:
README-BURNING-ISOS.xml doc-entities.xml rpm-info.xml
Log Message:
- Fix add'l references to nonexistent CDs (#242303)
- Follow style guidelines by making complete sentences from steps
- Don't assume rebooting into Windows or more than one disc made
These changes create a bunch of fuzzy messages, most of which are
trivial fixes. Forgive us, translators!
Index: README-BURNING-ISOS.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/readme-burning-isos/devel/en_US/README-BURNING-ISOS.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- README-BURNING-ISOS.xml 3 Jun 2007 09:10:53 -0000 1.4
+++ README-BURNING-ISOS.xml 3 Jun 2007 16:43:01 -0000 1.5
@@ -116,49 +116,10 @@
</para>
<para>
If you are downloading &DISTRO; &DISTROVER; for a Pentium 4
- computer, for example, you need these files:
- </para>
- <itemizedlist>
- <listitem>
- <para>
- <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-disc1.iso</filename>
- </para>
- </listitem>
- <listitem>
- <para>
- <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-disc2.iso</filename>
- </para>
- </listitem>
- <listitem>
- <para>
- <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-disc3.iso</filename>
- </para>
- </listitem>
- <listitem>
- <para>
- <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-disc4.iso</filename>
- </para>
- </listitem>
- <listitem>
- <para>
- <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-disc5.iso</filename>
- </para>
- </listitem>
- </itemizedlist>
- <para>
- Or, if you prefer to install from a single DVD, you only need
- this file:
- </para>
- <itemizedlist>
- <listitem>
- <para>
- <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-DVD.iso</filename>
- </para>
- </listitem>
- </itemizedlist>
- <para>
- You may also need the <code>SHA1SUM</code> file to verify that
- the files you have downloaded are complete and correct.
+ computer, for example, you need the file
+ <filename>&FCXVERSPIN;-i386-DVD.iso</filename>. You may also
+ need the <filename>SHA1SUM</filename> file to verify that the
+ files you have downloaded are complete and correct.
</para>
</section>
</section>
@@ -257,7 +218,7 @@
<command>sha1sum</command> with each ISO file like this:
</para>
<screen>cd "C:\Documents and Settings\Owner\My Documents\My Downloads\&DISTRO;"
-sha1sum.exe &FCXVERSPIN;-i386-disc1.iso</screen>
+sha1sum.exe &FCXVERSPIN;-i386-DVD.iso</screen>
<para>
The program takes some time to complete, since it must read the
entire ISO file.
@@ -296,10 +257,11 @@
the resulting CD is not usable for installation purposes.
</para>
<para>
- To create the &DISTRO; installation CDs, <emphasis role='strong'>it
- is vital that you only perform the second step</emphasis> with
- the &DISTRO; ISO files. The steps required to do this using
- several popular CD burning applications are listed below.
+ To create the &DISTRO; installation discs, <emphasis
+ role='strong'>it is vital that you only perform the second
+ step</emphasis> with the &DISTRO; ISO files. The steps required
+ to do this using several popular CD burning applications are
+ listed below.
</para>
<note>
<title>Disc Burning on Fedora</title>
@@ -319,24 +281,24 @@
<step>
<para>
In <application>Explorer</application>, right click on the
- first &DISTRO; ISO file
+ first &DISTRO; ISO file.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
In the context menu, select <guilabel>Copy image to
- CD</guilabel>
+ CD</guilabel>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
Follow the steps given by the <guilabel>CD Recording
- Wizard</guilabel> pop-up
+ Wizard</guilabel> pop-up.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Repeat for the remaining ISO files
+ Repeat for the remaining ISO files.
</para>
</step>
</procedure>
@@ -346,27 +308,22 @@
<procedure>
<step>
<para>
- Start <guilabel>Creator Classic</guilabel>
+ Start <guilabel>Creator Classic</guilabel>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Select <guilabel>Other Tasks</guilabel>
+ Select <guilabel>Other Tasks</guilabel>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Select <guilabel>Burn from Disc Image File</guilabel>
+ Select <guilabel>Burn from Disc Image File</guilabel>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Choose the first &DISTRO; ISO file and burn it
- </para>
- </step>
- <step>
- <para>
- Repeat the above steps for each of the other ISO files
+ Choose the &DISTRO; ISO file and burn it.
</para>
</step>
</procedure>
@@ -376,27 +333,27 @@
<procedure>
<step>
<para>
- Start the program
+ Start the program.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Open the <guimenu>File</guimenu> menu
+ Open the <guimenu>File</guimenu> menu.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Select <guimenuitem>Burn Image</guimenuitem>
+ Select <guimenuitem>Burn Image</guimenuitem>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Choose the first &DISTRO; ISO file and burn it
+ Choose the &DISTRO; ISO file and burn it.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Repeat the above steps for each of the other ISO files
+ Repeat the above steps for each of the other ISO files.
</para>
</step>
</procedure>
@@ -406,12 +363,12 @@
<procedure>
<step>
<para>
- Start the program
+ Start the program.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Select <guilabel>Disc Image or Saved Project</guilabel>
+ Select <guilabel>Disc Image or Saved Project</guilabel>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
@@ -422,19 +379,18 @@
</step>
<step>
<para>
- The next screen allows you to select <guilabel>Writing
- Speed</guilabel>. You should set this to 4x for DVD, or
- 16x for CD, for best performance.
+ Set the writing speed for your disc recorder. The optimal
+ setting depends on your specific hardware.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Click Next to Burn
+ Click Next to burn.
</para>
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Repeat the steps above for the other ISO files
+ Repeat the steps above for the other ISO files.
</para>
</step>
</procedure>
@@ -458,8 +414,8 @@
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Reboot the computer with disc 1 in the CD drive. The boot
- menu for the &DISTRO; installer appears.
+ Reboot the computer with the &DISTRO; disc in the CD drive.
+ The boot menu for the &DISTRO; installer appears.
</para>
</step>
<step>
@@ -475,17 +431,10 @@
</step>
<step>
<para>
- Conduct the check against the first disc. If the check
- succeeds, your disc is correct. At this point the installer
- has changed nothing on your computer. Remove the &DISTRO;
- installation disc and restart the system so that the computer
- boots into Windows.
- </para>
- </step>
- <step>
- <para>
- Burn the other three ISO images. After burning the other
- discs, you can repeat the media check to test them all.
+ Conduct the check against the disc. If the check succeeds,
+ your disc is correct. At this point the installer has changed
+ nothing on your computer. Remove the &DISTRO; installation
+ disc and restart the system.
</para>
</step>
</procedure>
Index: doc-entities.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/readme-burning-isos/devel/en_US/doc-entities.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.3
retrieving revision 1.4
diff -u -r1.3 -r1.4
--- doc-entities.xml 1 Apr 2007 21:13:25 -0000 1.3
+++ doc-entities.xml 3 Jun 2007 16:43:01 -0000 1.4
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
<group name="General">
<entity name="FCXHYP">
<comment>Short version of distro and optional hyphen</comment>
- <text><use entity="FCX"/></text>
+ <text><use entity="FCX"/>-</text>
</entity>
<entity name="FCXVER">
<comment>Short version of distro name and version</comment>
@@ -14,11 +14,11 @@
</entity>
<entity name="FCSPIN">
<comment>Name of primary ISO spin</comment>
- <text>Prime</text>
+ <text></text>
</entity>
<entity name="FCXVERSPIN">
<comment>Prefix for ISO file names</comment>
- <text><use entity="FCXVER"/>-<use entity="FCSPIN"/></text>
+ <text><use entity="FCXVER"/><use entity="FCSPIN"/></text>
</entity>
</group>
</entities>
Index: rpm-info.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/readme-burning-isos/devel/en_US/rpm-info.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.3
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diff -u -r1.3 -r1.4
--- rpm-info.xml 22 May 2007 00:09:42 -0000 1.3
+++ rpm-info.xml 3 Jun 2007 16:43:01 -0000 1.4
@@ -24,6 +24,10 @@
<title>Burning ISO Images to Disc</title>
<desc>How to download ISO images and create CD and DVD media</desc>
<changelog order="newest-first">
+ <revision date="2007-06-03" number="7.0.1">
+ <author worker="PaulWFrields"/>
+ <details>Fix file names, revise entities, and clean up details</details>
+ </revision>
<revision date="2007-05-21" number="7.0.0">
<author worker="PaulWFrields"/>
<details>F7 final release</details>