Example of what Leslie thinks is important.

[Leslie S Satenstein]

Perhaps I am a nitpicker, but for a while I earned my income as a contract technical
writer.  I wrote, I edited my stuff and then I passed my writings to an editor.  He
sometimes responded with tiny touchups, and at times he was cruel.  But the objective from
both of us was to have a succinct clearly written document.

I would like to illustrate the editing that I did to the following posting 


> From the https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Fedora_Join_SIG 

Background
We're looking to reduce the learning gradient that new folks need to 
hike up when they look to contribute to Fedora. Users looking to give 
back to the community is amazing. We need to go out and give them as 
much help as we can. The importance here is that most of them will be 
new to the work flows, SIGS, teams and processes that Fedora community 
uses. Quite a few of them will be new to Linux even. For these novices, 
learning all that is required to become contributors is a daunting task. However, what is
important is that all of them have the *potential* to 
make awesome contributors! 

After a primary edit.

We're looking to reduce the learning gradient that new folks need tohike upachieve
when they look to contribute to Fedora. Users looking to give 
back to the community is amazing. We need to go out and give them as 
much help as we can. The importance here is that most of them will be 
new to the work flows, SIGS, teams and processes that the Fedora community 
uses. Quite a few Some of them will be new to Linux even. For these novices, 
learning all that is required to become contributors is a daunting task. However, what is
important is that all of them have the *potential* to 
make awesome contributors! 
The edited version has the word achieve to replace the "hike up"  slang. Words
removed are in red, words inserted are in bold. One task of the editor is to reduce
wordiness.  (Quite a few --> Some).   The word "even" was redundant.

The absolute final after editing follows.

We're looking to reduce the learning gradient that new folks need toachieve when they
look to contribute to Fedora. Users looking to give 
back to the community is amazing. We need  give them as 
much help as we can. The importance here is that most of them will be 
new to the work flows, SIGS, teams and processes that the Fedora community 
uses.  Some of them will be new to Linux. For these novices, 
learning all that is required to become contributors is a daunting task. However, what is
important is that all of them have the *potential* to 
make awesome contributors! 

I have offered to edit stuff that you write, if you so desire.  Is there an need for an
English language editor?
 






 
Regards 

 Leslie

Mr. Leslie Satenstein
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